Hostage

[majinsharingan]

Chapter 1: Taken…

Shows the city of Vancouver from the streets and people walking on the streets and cars on the road: Sunday, March 15, 2008.
Shows people crossing the street: 4’o’clock.
Shows a bank: The bank has only 5 customers left.
Shows a Clint yelling at a teller inside the bank: And 5 minutes…till their lives change forever…
Clint, yelling at a woman teller: I don’t care if it says I can’t withdraw! I need the money to get out of town! All my information and cards check out! Why won’t you give me my money.
Woman Teller, name tag says Janie: I’m sorry sir, but your account says that you cannot take money out from this bank.
Clint: That’s bull! I want my money!
Janie: I’m sorry sir…
Janie uses her inhaler.
Janie: That is what the computer says…
Clint: I don’t care what the computer says! I want my money!
David, to Michael: Man this guy is loud.
Michael, to David: I know!
Libby: He better hurry up if we don’t get our withdrawal I’m gonna kick his ass!
Eric: Easy, babe. Let’s not get ourselves arrested today.
Libby: Fine!
A man with a long case in his hand walks in.
The man walks upstairs.
Janie: We can give you a check for this amount of money.
Clint sighs.
Clint: I don’t want a check! I need it on my card!
Jackal runs in: Yo! What’s takin’ so long!
Jessie: This guy’s not getting his money…it’s taking forever!
A father and son walk in, laughing.(Doug and Sammy)
Doug walks up to the teller: Um…Hi. I’d like to make a withdrawal from my account.
Adam: For how much?
Doug: Um…let’s see…about 150 loonies.
Adam, punches in some numbers.: I’ll get right on that.
Adam hands money to Doug and Doug takes it: Thank you!
Doug and Sammy walk away.
Shows James and Thomas sitting on a bench, James looking a bit shocked.
Thomas: It’ll be okay. I’ll go get Dad’s money.
James: Kay…
Thomas steps in line: Excuse me?
Shows Lilly: Could I cut ahead of you? It’ll just be real quick.
Thomas, looks back at Lilly.
Shows, Derek, Monty, Steven, Julia, Tyler, Liz and Hailey.
Lilly smiles: They’re all with me.
Thomas: Oh okay! Yeah go on ahead.
Lilly, walks in front of Thomas: Thank you.
Lilly walks up to the teller: I’d like to withdraw…
Lilly turns around.
Lilly: !
Shows 31 men, wearing all black and carrying guns standing in the center of the room.
Aston: Well hello.
Everyone turns around: !!!
Ryan shoots the ceiling twice: Alright!
Ryan: Here’s how it’s gonna go down…
Ryan: We’re cleaning out every vault, every box, every nook and cranny.
Ryan: There will be no questions. There will be no resistance.
Aston: Understood?
Ryan: Good…
Ryan points to where James is with his gun: Now everyone move over there! Including the tellers!
Everyone runs over to where James is.
Sammy starts crying: Daddy, I’m scared!
Doug, hugs and pats Sammy’s head: It’s okay son, it’s okay.
Clint, to himself: Well this is just perfect!
Steven: Fuck…
Ryan: No talking!
Benji: It’s fine, Ryan. We have guns, what’re they gonna do?
Ryan looks at Aston.
Aston: Whatever.
Ryan, into the walkie-talkie: How’s it looking up there?
Ian, looking through a sniper rifle and holding the walkie up to his mouth: Looks fine, no one in sight.
Ryan: Good.
Ryan, into another walkie: What about you?
Ben: I got upstairs fine, no one noticed me.
Thomas thought: So that was Ben…..
Ben: No sign of police on the strip.
Ryan: Good, keep it that way.
Ryan looks at the hostages and smirk.
Ryan: We’ll be taking the money. We will kill three of you. And take one of you with us. Then the rest of you are free to go.
Sammy cries more.
Thomas looks uneasy.
Adam fiddles with his wedding ring.
Monty and Julia hold hands.
Eric holds Libby close.
Monty fiddles with the bible in his back pocket.
Michael reaches back.
David shakes his head.
Michael puts his hand on his leg.
Aston: Ryan. Benji. Clean out the booths.
Aston points to his left: You three get the safe behind the booths.
Aston points to his right: You three get the safe next to it.
Aston: The rest of you…pick a level of the bank, and sweep it clean.
The men: Yes sir!
Aston: Now go!
The men run off.
Ian, through the walkie: Any trouble down there?
Aston: No trouble….
Aston smirks, evilly: The fun is just beginning.

(End of Chapter)

[majinsharingan]

Chapter 2: Story of Two Brothers

Shows James and Thomas’s father getting married to a woman.
Priest: You may now kiss the bride.
Their Father kisses the woman.
He smiles.
His wife smiles.
Their Father: One second.
His wife, smiling: Okay.
Thomas’s Father runs over to a young Thomas.
Thomas’s Father: Thomas…
Thomas: Yeah, Dad?
Thomas’s Father: Your new mom is going to have a baby.
Thomas, smiling: Really!
Thomas’s Father: Yeah, you’re going to have a little brother or sister.
Thomas: Cool!
Thomas’s Father: That’s right, kiddo! But you can’t tell your little brother or sister about your mom.
Thomas: Ellen?
Thomas’s Father: No…your…
Thomas’s Father looks sad: Your other mom….
Thomas looks sad: Oh…..
Thomas’s Father: Just don’t mention anything about her to the new baby okay?
Thomas: Alright…..
Thomas’s Father pats him on the head: Thanks, buddy.
Thomas’s Father walks off.
Shows Younger Thomas.
Shows Thomas as he is now.
Thomas walks up to James: Hey.
James: Hey….
Thomas: How you holding up?
James: Alright I guess…why do they have to split up?
Thomas: Ellen isn’t happy with Dad.
James: Yeah….I guess so….
Thomas: Look it’ll be okay….
James: But I’ll miss you and Dad! Why do I have to go with Mom!
Thomas: Ellen um….wants the younger child.
James: Why do you always call her Ellen? Why not call her mom?
Thomas looks down.
Thomas sighs.
Thomas: Because she’s not my mom.
James, surprised: What?
Thomas: My mom was married to Dad…but she died about two years before you were born….
James: So Ellen is my mom….and not yours?
Thomas: No….
James: So we’re not even brothers.
Thomas: No…we’re brothers…just Step Brothers…
James looks sad: Oh….
Thomas: Hey it’ll be okay, you can come over here on weekends okay?
James: Okay…
Thomas: Now come on….Dad needs money to fly to Ontario.
James: Right….
Shows Thomas and James driving in a car, Thomas is driving.
Thomas: So you and Mom going to stay in Vancouver?
James: I think…so much for visiting on the weekends….
Thomas: Then you’ll live with us during the summer.
James: But--
Thomas: James, this doesn’t matter right now.
James looks down and sad: …
Thomas: Sorry….
They pull up to the bank.
Thomas and James get out of the car.
Jackal is sitting on the roof of the van in front of them.
Thomas and James walk inside.
Thomas and James walk over to a bench.
Thomas looks over at something.
Thomas: Looks like it’ll be a while.
Shows James and Thomas sitting on a bench, James looking a bit shocked.
Thomas: It’ll be okay. I’ll go get Dad’s money.
James: Kay…
Thomas steps in line: Excuse me?
Shows Lilly: Could I cut ahead of you? It’ll just be real quick.
Thomas, looks back at Lilly.
Shows, Derek, Monty, Steven, Julia, Tyler, Liz and Hailey.
Lilly smiles: They’re all with me.
Thomas: Oh okay! Yeah go on ahead.
Lilly, walks in front of Thomas: Thank you.
Lilly walks up to the teller: I’d like to withdraw…
Lilly turns around.
Lilly: !
Shows 31 men, wearing all black and carrying guns standing in the center of the room.
Aston: Well hello.
Everyone turns around: !!!
Ryan shoots the ceiling twice: Alright!
Ryan: Here’s how it’s gonna go down…
Ryan: We’re cleaning out every vault, every box, every nook and cranny.
Ryan: There will be no questions. There will be no resistance.
Aston: Understood?
Ryan, into the walkie-talkie: How’s it looking up there?
Ian, looking through a sniper rifle and holding the walkie up to his mouth: Looks fine, no one in sight.
Ryan: Good.
Ian, through the walkie: How bout you?
Aston: No trouble….
Aston smirks, evilly: The fun is just beginning.


(End of Chapter)

[Summer.]

seems interesting.^^

*chap 2*

[Summer.]

I like it.
I'm looking forward to read more.

tho I still find Chi as the best of all your mangas. =]

[majinsharingan]

Yeah i know.
Thanks.
It gets better as it goes on, the first 7 chapters are just character backgrounds

[Summer.]

kk, post it, when you will write next chap^^

[majinsharingan]

Will do^^
:D

[GangstaKage]

Interesting,not as good as Chi but very interesting
I still have to read the one about the duck

[GangstaKage]

Why do I have to be the bad guy:(
Its good tho

[majinsharingan]

Yeah, I know this isn't gonna be as good as Chi but this is just a side-manga type thing, there's only gonna be 24 chapters.

[majinsharingan]

lol.
He wasn't named after you don't worry xD

[GangstaKage]

Why not??Oh well i guess thats good because if I was a burglar Id be mad at you

[majinsharingan]

Not that good of a chapter, just a character profile type chapter.

Hostage Chapter 3: A Simple Withdrawal

(Shows Chapter Page)

Shows Clint(angry man yelling at the teller) standing at the airport counter, a woman punching in something in her computer.
The woman places a ticket on the counter: Here you are sir, one ticket to Vancouver.
Clint grabs the ticket: Thank you ma’am.
Clint walks off, carrying a bag over his shoulder and lugging a suitcase on wheels behind him.
Clint sits down in a chair in the airport area.
Clint looks up a bit.
Shows a black board with Cities and times on them.
New York to Vancouver changes from 4:15 to now boarding.
Clint stands up: That’s me then.
Clint walks past a TV with the news on.
Clint walks back to it.
Clint takes out his phone and pushes a button.
Clint: Hello? Linda? It’s Clint Garner.
Clint: I’m fine, thank you. Listen, you need to buy.
Clint: As much as possible.
Clint: I’m sure.
Clint: Okay, talk to you later I’m about to board.
Clint hangs up his phone and walks on.
Clint walks into the plane.
Clint looks at his ticket.
Clint sits down by the window.
Someone through the intercom: This is your captain speaking, we are now taking off, please buckle your seatbelts.
Clint buckles his seat belt.
Clint leans his head against the window, the plane starting to move.
Clint closes his eyes.
Shows the plane flying in the sky.
Shows the plane coming down towards the runway.
The plane’s wheels land on the runway.
The plane shakes and Clint wakes up.
Clint looks out the window.
Shows the airport rolling by.
The plane stops.
Clint unbuckles his seat belt and picks up his bag.
Clint walks into the lobby in Vancouver.
Clint looks around.
Clint walks.
Clint walks out of the airport.
Clint, calling for a taxi: Hey!
The taxi stops and Clint gets in.
Clint: Waterfront Hotel.
The taxi drives on.
The taxi stops in front of a hotel.
Clint hands some money to the driver: Keep the change.
Clint gets out of the taxi.
Clint looks up.
Shows the large hotel.
Clint walks into the hotel.
Clint walks up to the desk.
Clint: Clint Garner. Roosevelt Appointment.
The woman looks types in her computer.
Woman: I’m sorry sir, but that appointment is not for another month.
Clint: What?
Clint punches numbers in his cell phone.
Clint: Hello? Harry what’s going on?
Harry, through the phone: Oh Clint, I’m sorry I couldn’t reach you the appointment has been pushed back a month.
Clint: Dammit.
Harry: Sorry. Look I gotta go, I’m about to go through a tunnel here so I’ll----
Static rings through the receiver.
Clint hangs up his phone.
Clint: Dammit.
Clint takes money out of his pocket.
Clint: Oh but of course.
Clint walks outside.
Clint calls a cab.
Clint gets in: The bank.
The cab speeds off.
Clint gets out of the cab.
Clint enters the building.
David’s Van pulls up outside.
Clint walks up to the teller.
David, Eric, Michael, Libby and Jessie enter the building.
They walk up to the teller next to Clint.
Clint hands her a card.
Janie checks the card.
Janie: I’m sorry sir you can’t withdraw.
Clint: What?
Janie: I says you can’t withdraw.
Clint: I don’t care if it says I can’t withdraw! I need the money to get out of town! All my information and cards check out! Why won’t you give me my money.
Janie: I’m sorry sir, but your account says that you cannot take money out from this bank.
Clint: That’s bull! I want my money!
Janie: I’m sorry sir…
Janie uses her inhaler.
Janie: That is what the computer says…
Clint: I don’t care what the computer says! I want my money!
Shows 31 men, wearing all black and carrying guns standing in the center of the room(Aston: Well, Hello)
The men shoot the ceiling a few times.
Everyone runs over to where James is.
Ryan, into the walkie-talkie: How’s it looking up there?
Ben: No sign of police on the strip.
Ryan: Good, keep it that way.
Ryan looks at the hostages and smirk.
Ryan: We’ll be taking the money. We will kill three of you. And take one of you with us. Then the rest of you are free to go.
Clint looks a bit scared.
Ben: Ryan? What about you? You having any problems?
Aston: No trouble….
Aston smirks, evilly: The fun is just beginning.

(End of Chapter)

[majinsharingan]

*officially off hiatus but current progress is very slow*